| Author | lords of war story by me 11year old. comments and suggestion |
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| wiz king your sotry is no better |
a story isnt judged on its cover but but what is inside the cover
how can you judge a 60-70 para story based on the first 2 paras? |
suggestions plz
and wizking u said a good start means a great story |
| i will try to keep it on top |
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well...i m no pro...
but as a reader...it would look nice if there were some space in the story...
its just like a continous line..and a reader will get tired even by it in the first place...
trust me...it's good...but not in the first sight...:) |
| even by seeing it in the first place... |
so u want line breaks or something.
K ill do that for the sequel.
Guys thnx for the comments but plz give me suggestions now
what title for this story and what shud i name the next story and ideas about how it shud go |
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gold for whose suggestion i take.
ISNT THAT ENOUGH TO GIVE SUGGESTIONS |
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ISNT THAT ENOUGH TO GIVE SUGGESTIONS
man, you are the author! Think of something on your own... |
thats what i am doing.
But still more the suggestions better the story |
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