| Author | The invasion of earth 2 |
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well i don't think this name will fit because a lot of you wanted from the beginning to know what is the story so i created a story from my own brain ok i will start
Chapter1:The born of Hierarchy
A long time a go in a planet called Marasam an ancient civilization named the Masari was living there those humanoids could create energy from nothing that made them think they are Gods in 2300ms(for masari date i think earth was not born yet)the new king of masari King PathelonIII didn't like seeing his people working in places he thought it doesn't fit for a masari so he asked all his scientists to try and create a new species that serve them the masari scientists used mutagen to create hideous monsters to serve them they called them the Hierarchy the masari trait their inventions as slaves which made the hierarchy mad at their gods and started thinking of a way to free themselves after 100 years the hierarchy started a plan to shock the masari and make them helpless so they rebelled fast and destroyed the masari military bases king PathelonIII retreated and his people to a space ship called Altea an evacuation ship the masari flied from their home country while the hierarchy thought they defeated their masters forever.
Chapter 2 is coming soon |
Chapter2:Looking for a new home
After being defeated by their creations and the death of their king that made the new king just an 18 years old boy Prince PathelonIV the masari started looking for a new planet to live there it was 12:00 at night when an Architect entered the throne room
Architect:My lord we found a suitable planet to live on it has no civilization on it but its also have a lack of resources and its not good for us at the mean time for our high loses
King PathelonIV:deploy an outpost and put general Kapthec in control of it and try to find any civilzation or a new type of resources and we will keep searching for a more suitable planet to live on
Architect:yes my lord i will go tell him right away.
the Architect lives the room quickly and runs to general kapthec room to tell him the news;he enters his room
General Kapthec:what is it Architect?
Architect:King Pathelon orders you to deploy and out post on this planet and search for any civilization or a good type of resources will he will continue his search for a good planet.
the Architect lives the room and general kapthec go to the command room to fulfill the order.
after 2 days general kapthec and some masari people establishes a base on the planet while King PathelonIV continue to search |
| still some errors but better 4/10 |
| sry for grammar mistakes and i will appreciate any feed bags for how to make the story line better |
| i give 7 x 8 / 7 = /10 |
Chapter3:A new Civilization
It was 2 years ago when the masari first landed here they developed good technology and constructed more outposts in this deserted planet one day while an Inquisitor(its a flying unit its really just a person inside an armor)was patrolling a new area that had a weird type of plants he suddenly heard a sound from behind the plants Inquisitor nervously said:W-Who there?!suddenly a weird scorpion with insect qualities jumped from behind the plants and start running to a hill Inquisitor:WAIT!!Worker said fearfully:(not recognized language)XD i will translate it :Help!!strangers.and he entered a whole in the hill the Inquisitor returned to the outpost and quickly entered the command room Inquisitor:h..h..h Sir i found a creature in this planet......
General Kapthec:what you did to him?!
Inquisitor:nothing sir i couldn't talk to him he ran away quickly and spoke in other language SIR
General Kapthec:ok soldier dismiss
Inquisitor:Yes Sir
then general kapthec looked at an Architect and called him
Architect:yes general
General kapthec:prepare a transport with one seer and some Disciples for protection and you will come with me to translate their language(Architect are masari builders and they use their brain power to build O.O so i think they can be used in translating and the seer is a human radar that can read enemy mind and the disciples are masari infantry)
Architect:Yes General i will do it.and the Architect went to the port to call a trans port.After 2 hours the transport landed near the hill and General Kapthec and his troops approached the hill when a Scorpuron was entering the hole he saw General kapthec and his troops the Scorpuron worker ran down and then 4 soldiers came out with 1 that seemed the leader or(REGNANT)
in the next chapter you will know if they are friends or foes |
for Terengganu:
i give 7 x 8 / 7 = /10
You mean: 7 x 8 / 7 = 8
Stop posting usless junk in other people topics.
As for story your getting there just need to work on paragraphing and punctuation. |
| much better. |
