| Author | When worlds collide [Comments] |
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Please comment here
I have general idea on where I want this story to go but any ideas slash CONSTRUCTIVE criticism would be appreciated
P.S. Yes I will explain the other clouds soon |
| great |
you use the word 'their' a lot :)
and sometimes in the wrong way....
in the beginning THERE was nothing (nice biblical reference haha)
THERE were eight different colors
and i'd prefer shorter paragraphs - you know, one point/message per paragraph. for example, in the first paragraph (halfway), a split between 'behind' and 'Eventually'... |
Thanks stoter
BTW you are pretty good to pick up on that reference :-P
Chapter 2 to be posted soon |
Chapter 2 is posted
Chapter 3 - "What goes up must come down" will be posted soon
I am trying to average about a chapter per day or so |
| its awesome! |
I love the titles of you chapters,they sound professional.
Unlike some other titles.
Lordswm is doing a great job in tapping the hidden author's potent in players.~ |
So far
Chapter 1 - When time began
Chapter 2 - Let the arrows fly
Chapter 3 - What goes up must come down (To Be Posted Soon) |
Chapter 3 is posted
Next chapter is already being worked on
Chapter 4 - Open the gates |
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for SpeedOfSound:
thanks for typing and posting |
Nice work =)
I'd like to see the magic (Billir) vs the strenght (barbians). If it happens, give some advantage for magics :P |
| Sorry for the delay on chapter 4, I had an exam yesterday |
