| Author | Neru-The Demon Quest |
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I am not a skilled writer,if I make mistake,please correct me.
Prologue-This Is Just A Beginning
Long ago,we demon live at the surface just as the other races.Unfortunately,we were being driven to the hell by a ambush of the knight.
We demon planned to rise to the surface of the world and claim what belong to us.I was left behind since I was too young.10 imps and demon were left to guard my safety.
That night,a mistresses rush into my room.She was hurt.I try to heal her but it seem useless.She gave me one amulet of luck saying that this will help me in my future journey.Than she open a secret door for me.She said"This chamber hold great magic that you should learn".She died,in front of me.
An imp rush in and told me"The portal to the surface has been seal".I was angry and sad.I swear I will had my revenge on those knight. |
Chapter 1:The beginning of the Journey
Five years have pass,I have learn the chaos magic and darkness magic as show at the chamber.I have ready to travel to the surface and have revenge for my race.I was equip with a light axe and round shield.
Since th portal had been seal,I had to summon a new portal.I gathered the leftover army(10 imps and 10 demon)and open a portal.Luckily the portal open and we stepped to the surface of the world.
My amulet of luck gave out a version.My father had stored his soul in this amulet to guild me in my journey.According to my father,they were slaughter by alliance that made up of knight,wizard,necromancer,elf,dark elf and barbarian.I was told to travel to the Great Capital.I will found wolfhounds that will aided me in my journey.
At the night,I arrived at the Great Capital.Wolfhounds had become the guard dog of the Empire knight.I try to communicate with one of them and it told me they will aid me if I free them.I ordered my troops to gate reinforcement from the hell and used them to attack the knight.
Swordmen and bowmen guarding wolfhounds easily defeat the gated imps.
As they thought they were victorious,we attacked them and killed all of them.
We free the wolfhounds and they join me.
My father appeared again and told me I should headed to the East Bay.
My next destination will hold a great secret to my race future.
Chapter 2 coming soon. |
| ok its good but pleas change it in just one thing the alliance necromancers are enemies of knights and wizards so they will never get in 1 alliance with knights or wizards |
| well,thank for the feedback. |
Chapter 2:Vision
Today,I arrived at East Bay.
At night,I had a vision.
My race had been killed at this place.
They were defeated by the knight,barbarian,elf,dark elf and magician.They were outnumbered and many of them became slave to keep surviving.
When my father lead the rest of demon retreat to hell,they were ambushed by necromancer and all of them died.
I woke up and cried.
My amulet shined again.This time,my father told me to head toward Silent Hills.The succubi were captured by the barbarian to blow the mountain.
Silent Hills,here I came.
Chapter 3 coming soon
Thank you Romiah for your feedback. |
| np but thanks you for not putting my race with those mortals they dont deserve to fight in our side |
| ok............this is interestin,this is the first time ive ever been in the forum's!yay!anyways,necro's shouldnt be with those mortals.i totally agree with romiah |
Chapter 3:Freedom to succubi
After three day of traveling,I finally arrived at Silent Hills.The Barbarian had set 10 ogres and 2 ogres magi to patrol the entrance to their hideout.Rocs were flying at sky.I order my wolfhounds to gate some unit.
The gated units then sneaked through the ogres and ogres magi.After half an hour,they returned a good news.The succubi were being locked at the underground.My army ambushed the ogres and ogres magi and successfully defeated them.We carefully went through the gated of Barbarian nation because I didn't want to let the rocs to knew our presence and gave warning to the other.After arriving the underground,I easily killed the wolf riders and goblins with magic arrow spell.
I free the succubi and escaped to the surface.
A group of orcs found us and try to alert the other but was being killed by succubi.
After leaving the Barbarian village,I decided to go to ridge of hope.The dragon there could helped me to raise my experience.
Chapter 4 coming soon. |
| very good first story i ever read in forum |
| I think it's a bit too short.I still it okay. |
thank techy for your opinion.
For CrossXvamki,this is the first time I write story.
I will try to improve my story.
Thank you. |
I think it's a bit too short. |
| write some more first story ii interested in |
