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| Author | The dreamer |
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He walks home from school after being beat up again.
"Sniff, I hate them," he utters to himself
"I hate them so much!" his words get louder as he tightens his grip to his bookbag as he walks home with his best friend, Kimberly.
Kimberly "Its ok. One day those bullies are gonna get whats comin to them."
Kid "sniff, yeah, but does it always have to be you who gives it to them?"
Kimberly "Why don't you ever fight back? They only pick on you cuase you never fight back."
They walk for a few blocks as the kid contemplates her words as he has for the last two years now. He wants to say he is not scared but she has known him since kindergarten and here they are in the fourth grade.
Kimberly "I mean, I remember when you use to be a bully yourself. What happened?"
Kid " I've told you that story a bunch of times now. You know why I don't fight no more Kim."
Kim "Yeah well, I've heard it but if you don't want to fight no more then why do you keep running and screaming my name everytime those bullies come at you Nazario?"
Nazario "Why do you think I keep screaming your name?! And you know I hate that name."
She looks at him bewildered.
he continues "I know I use to be the king of the yard back in the day, but you know that kid taught me to not be a bully. And ever since then, I.....I....I just don't want to fight no more. And it was right after that I met you. I mean, well you know, after that we became friends, and well, I don't know, I'm trying to say sumthin but don't know how."
They have known each other for quite some time now, so she knows him by his grandmothers nick name for him also.
Kim "Still 'Tito', thats no reason to not fight back." she tries to look at him with a serious face but he acts as if he can't see her and continues to walk forward. "One day I'm not gonna be here to protect you."
He continues to walk pretending not to hear as he has the last two years. | | is this story about you? ;) | | There are going to be alot of elements from my childhood written in this story as I will tie it in to my character here in the game. | Episode II- The Wooden Sword
As they continue to walk all that is spoken is done by nature and their surroundings. The flapping wings of griffons over head, water flowing from cannals, horses pulling carriages and messangers going about.
He walks her home to her door in the old village he use to stay in.
Kim "So hows your grandma been?" she says breaking the silence and his daydreaming. He breathes out heavily...
Tito "You don't have to pretend ya know." he responds while rolling his eyes.
Kim " What?" she shruggs her shoulders with her hands raised out
"You know how my grandma feels about elfs." says Tito as he stares at the ground while twisting his foot into the dirt.
Kim " Well, maybe she'll feel different seeing as shes in a hospital full of my kind."
He begins to walk away, turns around and closes the wooden gate behind him.
"You don't know my grandma," he pauses "she'll just say she rather have died and then tell me I smell like elfs."
"Ha haha hehe," a laugh escapes Kim "that'll come in handy the next time by little brother gets lost if she can smell us."
He looks up at her amazed she can make a joke out of prejudice and then lets out a mild chuckle.
Tito "I don't see how you can be like that. If someone hated me for no reason I'd be pretty mad."
Kim "Yeah, then you'd come runnin to my hut cuase they're trying to beat you up. Hahaha!"
Tito "HEY!! Thats not funny!" he scowls and begins to walk off.
Kim "Hey! Aren't you forgetting something?" she tosses him his wooden sword.
Without even looking he reaches out and grabs it out of the air. "wow," she mutters to herself not knowing he meant to wave her off and caught it by accident but he ever so smoothly acted like he meant to do that and placed it in the small unzipped part of his bookbag on his back as it were the swords case. She wonders to herself if he ever realized that she enchanted the sword with morale. "Nah, he's to dumb." she says to herself as she watches him walk off to his village. "Hope he don't run into that plains wolf again."
He walks off headed towards his house as he again begins to daydream.
END OF EPISODE II
EPISODE III - Tito v.s. plains wolf | | I know this may progress a bit slow but I am trying to develop a good enough backround where people can have a little understanding of the character. | Seems good so far, the way you mix your childhood within the game is good. But we need to see a bit of action.
And eventually bring demons DE mages and so on into it. | | as a matter of fact, the real life player who brought me to this game in the first place will be apart of the very next episode along with action. By the way, Kimberly is a real childhood friend and she is represented as a elf, not dark elf, in here. But don't get use to her as she may have a long standing impact on the character but not a long standing role, just like in my real life. | EPISODE III
TITO V.S. PLAINS WOLF
"THIS IS A KID WHO TAUGHT ME NOT TO BE A BULLY" he screams to himself
Thrust, parry, pivot, slash, uppercut sword! Words uttered unto the imagination of Tito. As he continues to walk he remembers the first time he ever lost. Even though he won in the end, in the end he lost.
It was a day like any other. Clear skies, and plenty of kids to pick on. He walked thru the school yard and looked for someone he hadn't proven his fightings skills to. Just like his daddy told him.
Further Flashback...
Dad" Boy! I'm gonna teach you how ta fight!"
Tito remembers those words to a tee.
" And if ANYBODY picks on you, you best kick thier ass unless you want me to kick yours!"
Tito was only 4 when his father told him this, but at the same time, Tito wanted to learn.
Current day of the story...
Now though his father did not really teach him how to fight, his father was severly addicted to ale and beat Tito most everyday. Thru this, no mere child could ever hurt Tito. And Alberto, Tito's father, was one of the most promising swordsmen in Tito's Grandmothers army.
So after she became ill, Tito had to stay with his real father for awhile.
Arazanos the demon spoke "FIGHT!"
Again his daydream came to an end as Tito wondered who did he just hear talking to him.
At first it was just flashes of the kid grabbing Tito's punch to flip Tito on his back over and over again.
"Grrrr!!"
Tito "I don't remember the kid growling" he thinks to himself
"Grrrm, ROOOW!!!" the plains wolf lunges at the head of Tito.
"Woah!!!" Tito yells and instictivly Tito grabs his bookbag from his back and slides it to his frontside to deflect the attack of the plains wolf.
"Damnit!! That stupid old barbarian woman let her plains wolf escape again.!"
he yells to himself
These were the times he could not call on Kim, and he believed at the same time she would not believe he actually won these fights as she believed him to be truely cowardly. Little did he know that she truly did believe in him, thus the reason she enchanted the sword, hoping he would believe in himself.
Just as he brought his bookbag forward he grabbed his sword and thwacked the plains wolf on the nose with a critical blow.
The wolf yelped in pain. Then it slowly began to encircle Tito while all the time growling. For some reason he was less afraid of wild animals than he was actual people.
When the wolf attacked, the voice in his head talked again.
"KILL IT!!!" the demons voice commands
"GRrrraaaahhhhhhhHHHH!!!" young lucid screamed
The wolf charged at Tito but he dodged the wolfs attack with unhuman speed and thrusts his sword to the back of the wolf's head delivering a critical and finishing blow in only two turns at the age of 9. | | huh ? with a wooden sword ? lol ;) | | congrats to Tito for being the first 9 old kid to kill a wolf with a wooden sword lol | | yeah, well back when I was a kid there use to be this old lady with like 15 dogs in her yard and from time to time one of them would dig a hole and escape. And I usually had the good fortune to run into it on the way home from school and all I ever had was my bookbag and a stick to defend myself. I probably could have killed it with a real wooden sword that was enchanted with morale. | | interesting, good story, curious to what happens next. | | #12 second that | EPISODE IV
SCATTERBRAINED BOY AND A LITTLE BIT OF KARMA
There he was. A kid just begging to be picked on. Tito runs up at him and throws his haymaker and before you know it, Tito was in an unfamiliar position. On the ground.
Tito" How the heck..." he gets up and charges at the kid again. And again he ends up on the floor. Tito gets up again, "ok, I'm comin at you again and whatever it is your doin, do it again." Tito was so fascinated with how the kid kept grabbing his punch and flipping him over his shoulder to slam Tito on the floor that he did it over and over again. The kid was baffled by how willing Tito was to get slammed over and over again. And then it finally happened, Tito learned the counter-move. As the kid released his grip to let Tito fly to the ground, Tito grabbed the kids hand and using the momentum flipped the kid over him.
Tito walks up to the kid and stands over him.
kid" ow maan! That was my best move. Go 'head, beat me up."
Tito looked at him, he reached his hand out as the kid flinched and closed his eyes.
Tito"No, I'm not gonna beat'cha. And if anybody messes with ya, they're gonna have to deal with me."
The kid grabbed his hand and stood up.
Kid"Thanks. Grrrrr..."
BACK TO REALITY
Tito"I don't remember the kid growling."
He snaps out of his daydream with his sword still in the back of the plains wolf neck. As he raises his sword he realizes its snapped in two.
Arazanos the demon "Turn around!"
Tito"Ahhh MAN! Not again!!"
This time he turns around to the sight of two plains wolves.
Arazanos the demon "Fight!"
Tito turns around and runs. "Ahhh! Kim!" he knows she is back in her village but he yelled it anyways out of habit. The wolves run barking and nipping at Tito's heels. He continues to run in zig zag forms flinging his bookbag backwards trying to hit thier noses.
"oh man! ooh man! I'm gonna die! I'm gonna die! HEEEEEELLP!!"
He runs by a yard when all of a sudden another plains wolf jumps the fence and joins the others to chase him.
"OH COME ON!!!" he screaches angrily at the sky as if to direct it to a celestial being.
Just then he runs across a horse pulling a carriage and manages to get one of the plains wolves trampled upon but he loses his footing and stumbles to the floor scrapping both of his forearms upon impact. He quickly scoots to his butt and crawls backwards. The wolves draw nearer with mouths wide open and teeth glistening with drool. The closest wolf growls viciously and leaps into the air to pounce on Tito. He closes his eyes to scared to move and sure he was gonna die.
As what seemed an enternity passed he opened his eyes to see a older boy with his hand extended and the plains wolves layed out on the ground.
Older Boy "Don't worry, I'm not gonna beat'cha, and if any plains wolves messes with ya again, they're gonna have to deal with me. By the way, names Pantheon." | | Thats funny, I just finished writing this and did a hunt against elven bowmen and they grrrrd at me. Maybe they're reading my thread too. lol | | i dont like reading books, yet i find myself drawn to this story, good work sensei keep it up. | Didn't plan on commenting, but since you asked :P
I don't quite lke the script-likeness of the story:
Char A sais "..."
Char B sais "..."
-Action-
Not to say that it's bad, but not my type. That said, I've read 1st chapter only. Probably won't read more though. | Well thanks for the feedback. I would make episode 5 for all 2 1/2 of my fans but I'm actually gonna try and put some thought into the next one. Most likely will be script style but will work on developing other styles one day. But I'm a comic book type of guy so I write that way I guess.
I wrote all of them so far freestyle and drunk (except for part four I wasn't drunk). Meaning no premeditated scripts or thoughts, just writing thinking it would be good enough. Even I am not satisfied with the results. But with time I should get better. Hopefully. haha. | but not my type.
I agree, it's not much of my type either. But I don't mind it, I like to read different styles. :) Do continue, I'll read them whenever I get the time and in mood to read. :P | | I am still working on the next episode. If anyone has critic, please don't be rude, or even cheers on my writings, plz leave a post. I know thus far has not been to great, but I am hoping to make the next one up to at least decent standards. | | closed by Lucid-Naz (2009-03-18 07:31:59) |
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