| Author | TALES OF THE 7 EMPIRE |
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VIEW THIS WEPAGE FOR THE STORY:
http://taleofthe7lord.blogspot.com/
SORRY JUST THE INTRO IS FINISHED
HOPE YOU LIKE IT
SOME STORY:
THERE WERE JUST 3 KINGDOMS AT START.AFTER 15 MILLION YEARS.
4 MORE KINGDOMS APPEAR.ALL OF THEM GOOD AT DIFFRENT ABILITY. THEN ONE OF THE KINGDOMS BETRAYED ALL THE KINGDOMS.A WAR HAPPEND.MILLIONS AND BILLIONS OF DEAD.
FOR MORE READ THERE
SORRY JUST UNTRO IS POSTED
HALF OF THE STORY IS FINISHED.
PLEASE LEAVE YOUR RESPOND THERE OR HERE
IF YOU LIKE IT I WILL POST MORE
UPDATED MONTHLY
HOPE YOU LIKED IT
[Player banned by moderator Brilliant until 2010-06-27 15:39:48 // No full caps on titles. Relapse.] |
Try not to use capital letters for all your text; its difficult to read.
Also, its gives an impression you are shouting. |
THE 7TH SON OF THE 7TH SON OF THE 7TH SON OF THE 7TH KING'S MONK NAMED AS AZAROTH REQUEST TO TRAVEL TO THE HOLY FOREST
err...?
[Player banned by moderator Pang until 2010-06-28 16:39:22 // no full cap in msg as well] |
| i'm pretty sure english ain't your first language so i guess some kudos are in order. but a lot of your story doesn't make sense or is just silly, like the line quoted by brutalstrike. why not just say the monk of the 7th king. why so repitition |
| thanks for that advised navimegaman |
and the dates u gave are far from realistic, even for fiction XD
and u might want to stay away from the caps lock key as well...i only read part of your story, then stopped as it was starting to hurt my eyes! lol
only use caps when u're trying to convey something important, perhaps? :) |
| thanks for the advised SwitchBlad3 I will try to make it better. |
| the second one maybe still in capslock but the 3rd till the last will no more full caps |
| You do need to improve your control over the language. ;) |
I am low in english
and thanks for the advised |
| the second are posted |
| basically......in this story....it is given that wizards were evil......lol....i was the strongest one....haha.......all wizards give me my lorekeepers back......hahalol |
yep just the intro
got 14 more to be publish
1-2 per month |
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